Mattress
Wet slide
Human hides
Writhing sheets
Perspire
Bloody smear
Powdered cheek
Damp crevasse
Impasse
Flesh prays
Animal sway
Silence runs away
Human hides
Writhing sheets
Perspire
Bloody smear
Powdered cheek
Damp crevasse
Impasse
Flesh prays
Animal sway
Silence runs away
posted by Ultra Toast Mosha God at 5:59 AM
3 Comments:
Interesting use of numeric lines, particularly as the first 4 say it all.
Graphic.
Both intensely visceral and highly evocative. Good work!
The first four lines have a rhthym as strong as any chant.
You have a very tight structured style. I'm all free versy-hither tither, so this is culture shock.
But in a good way.
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